Peer Review Felicity McManus, Wk 9

Felicity, I loved your blog! Your mix of short and long sentences made for an engaging, entertaining read. I particularly liked how you referred to the future in the industrial revolution as a ‘calamity that is swiftly approaching.’ To heighten the passion and emotion in your piece, I would add some exclamation marks (i.e ‘Well, to hell with convention.) It was an imaginative way to advise your friends on your departure from conventional education. I also appreciated your acknowledge of the positives of conventional education but also highlighted that it simultaneously holds restrictions.

Great blog!

Victoria

Link to blog: https://felicitymcmanus.wordpress.com/ 

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